Problem Solution Essay

For this module, we are taught and tested on problem solution essay.
Problem solution essay goes by the structure of introduction, impact, current solution, evaluation of current solution, suggested solution, followed by conclusion. This structure only serves as a guideline and can be changed accordingly, but there must be at least one impact, current solution, evaluation of current solution and suggested solution, in addition to introduction and conclusion.

For this essay, the topic was on an inequality that resulted from globalisation and I picked income inequality in America.
Draft 1

After completing the draft, we get to choose between peer review or self review. As I felt that my work was not ready to be seen, I did a self review. From my self review and listening to the points stated in class, I've realised I made quite a number of mistakes. My main mistakes were the introduction, which I failed to mention how globalisation result in income inequality, concluding paragraph, which I only restated the problem and not the solution, and my language for the essay, which I've made many errors.

Although I am satisfied with the body of my essay, I still wasn't sure on how to do the introduction and conclusion paragraph.
Draft 2 - with professor's review

After the review and consultation with Ms Anita, I've gain a better understanding on how to write the introduction and conclusion. In addition, I also learnt that the essay should follow a theme to have a better flow. For example, in my impact paragraph, I've mention health and social problems as a consequence resulted from income inequality. However, for the rest of the essay, there was no mentioning of health and social problems. This would disrupt the flow of the essay and throw the reader off.

After making further changes, I am quite satisfied with my work. :)
Essay Final
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Reader Response

As we were learning paraphrasing and summarising before, reader response can be counted as the first official encounter to academic essay. To ease us into academic essay, we were ask to choose between 3 news articles to summarise. The chosen article then became the topic for our reader response and the summary became our introduction, my article was on wealth inequality in Singapore.

We were then taught on the purpose of reader response essay and how to write one, which we were then required to produce the first draft of reader response.
Draft 1

Afterwards, we had an in class peer review on our drafts. I had initially thought that what I've written was of poor standard as I was not sure of what I was doing. However, after the peer review, I had gain some confidence in knowing that I had managed to meet some of criteria. There was not much to change as our peer review did not consist of the language of the essay, but more of the flow. But one tip I picked up from this review was that I could not just show the evidence to back up my point, rather, I have to further explain how the evidence link to my point.

After we made changes on the draft, we then handed that in to our professor (Ms Anita) for further review.
Draft 2 - with professor's comments

After receiving back the review from Ms Anita, we then have to do up our final draft and submit it for grading. From the comments received, I've found out the the language for my essay was the biggest problem and my points were not linking back to the thesis statement. In addition to that, my topic sentence for the paragraph on entrepreneurship was throwing people off on my thesis statement. I've changed the draft to what I could submit for grading and hoped for the best.
Final Draft
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Critical Reflection: My Academic Writing

After taking the QET test, I was assigned to take ES1102: English for academic purposes which I had initially thought was a waste of time. However, after attending this module, I feel that this module is interesting and worth the time.

Through this module, I have gained new knowledge as well as refreshed old ones. Some things I've learnt are writing clearly rules, different types of reporting verbs, and how to write a good reader response and problem solution essay. Old knowledge that was refreshed includes proper paraphrasing and citations.

I feel that the exercises that were given to us are very useful as it is one thing to know the rules, and another to know how to use it. The writing clearly exercise was very helpful as it also included examples that were taken from our own essay. This helps us better relate and understand the areas that we went wrong. Another exercise that was of great help is the citation one. As it makes us practice the common citations, it is much easier for when we are making the reference list for the essay.

Through this module, I have found that my strength lies in being able to easily do the evaluation of current solution. However, I also found out many of my weaknesses, some of which I already knew. One weakness being delivering and linking of ideas. I find it quite difficult to bring my thoughts into sentence, though this module has helped improved it. Another weakness is my grammar. As this module went through the basics such as tenses and part of speech, I was able to relearn these. Furthermore, we were taught a clear distinction between academic and non-academic language, it makes it easier to understand which words we should use and how to use them.

As I haven't been trying to improve my English previously, I thought about how I could continue to improve after this module and decided that more reading is required. Therefore, I would be reading at least one news article per day and practice the critical thinking on it.

To write a good academic essay, I believe that there should always be planning before writing. This way, you would not loose the idea you had and it would be easier to make the essay flow. Other than that, it would be the classic phrase of practice makes perfect.

Lastly, I would like to thank Ms Anita for this wonderful experience in ES1102. Her teachings were very easy to understand, and it is always pleasant to go for class. I am also very grateful for her willingness and patience in helping us. And also how understanding she is of our other school commitments.

I had a fun time, thank you Ms Anita. ^^
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My English language learning journey

From young, I always knew my English wasn't good. I was often criticized by my family and asked to read more books. However, I felt that as long as I could bring my point across, it was sufficient, so I always ignored what they said.

In secondary school, with the help of my family members and English teacher, my grades were volatile. I could go from just passing in one term, to A1 the next. This never really bothered me except during O levels when I scored C6.

Since I did not do well for English, I decided to go to a polytechnic. In poly, English is not strongly emphasize, teachers would not penalise your report for language. Furthermore, a trick I have learnt to tackle plagiarism was to simplify your language to the most basic form. Therefore, for my poly course, there was no improvement for my language.

Now coming into university, I realized that the standard of English that I am at is not enough. I could not write anything without someone to proof read for me or guide me in what I should write. Therefore, while ES1102 is a prerequisite for my other modules, I am also glad that I am here to learn something new and refresh the stuffs that I have learnt but hardly practiced.
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About me

Hello~~~

My name is Yina and I'm 21 this year. My major is computer science and I chose that because during my poly course (financial informatics), I was introduced to programming and found it intriguing.

My hobbies includes watching anime/variety shows, reading comics, staring into space and online shopping. I also like playing games like pokemon and sims.

I am very picky when it comes to food. There are a few types of food that I don't eat or avoid, but spicy food is something I can never take. It upsets me when people try to convince me to eat it by saying that its actually not that spicy.
I love to eat fishball, but only the fresh kind. My favourite currently is the fishball manufactured from BoBo company. I really love to eat dessert type of food and when I go for buffet, more than often, I would start of with the desserts.

I am a pretty territorial person, if there is food that I have claimed as mine, nobody is allowed to take it without permission. Trespassers will be prosecuted! I also hate it when someone lies on my bed. I would kick that person off and change my bed sheet covers.

I don't really know what to say since I don't have much preference in  many things so bye~~~
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